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Gee, all that blurb about me seems to have been written ages ago. *beepbeepbeep* It was written ages ago.

Oh-h.

If you're clever, you can make a Moriarty "Oh" like that stretch over two syllables. Of course, Lionel Atwell(sp) did it the best, seeing as he was the bloke who dunnit first.

:roll:

Do you know, if you freeze that eye-rolling smiley at a certain moment, it goes cross-eyed. :lol:

Since I am not interesting, and not interested that you're not interested in the fact that I am not interesting or interested about not being interested in being not interesting, here are random scraps of poems for your enjoyment and entertainment. I cannot promise that they are word perfect.


He thought he saw a buffalo
Upon the chimney-piece.
He looked again and found it was
His sister's husband's niece.



Hey now, come hoy now.
Whither do you wander?
Up, down, near, far,
Here, there, or yonder.
Swish-tail, Wise-nose,
Sharp-Ears and Bumpkin.
White-Socks, my little lad, and old Fatty-Lumpkin!



In winter when the woods are white,
I sing this song for your delight.
In autumn when the woods are brown,
Take pen and ink and write it down.
In spring when fields are getting green,
I'll try and tell you what I mean.



The sun shone down,
Bright and bold,
Upon a deep green wood.
And in that wood there was a clearing,
And in that clearing stood-
A fine white hart,
White as milk,
With antlers sharp and a coat of silk.



Gil-galad was an Elven king,
Of him the harpers sadly sing.
The last whose realm was fair and free,
Between the mountains and the sea.




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There. Wery wunterful, I'm sure. :P
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ShadowTwit wrote:Hi, I'm me.
Anyway, even if reviews are given with tips, they are all about how you could structure this sentance differently, or how this word is spelt wrong, or how your grammer isn't grammatical. The reviewers say NOTHING about whether the story itself was a orignal/funny/touching/enjoyable, whether the characters were believable, whether the plot was good. I'm not saying that grammer and everything isn't important, it is. But the story is important too, and hardly anyone takes notice of it.
I find the reviews I get on Fanfiction.net more constructive and encouraging.


If you see such a void, then you should act to fill it. Criticizing others for what you perceive is a bad review is not the way to go. Rather, you should try to act by example.

But welcome to YWS. I do hope that you do change your mind about posting and take the initiative to begin writing reviews based on the criteria that you mentioned. Of course, please don't critique other critiques. Doing that is not helpful to anyone.

So, howdy! :P




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Nate wrote:If you see such a void, then you should act to fill it. Criticizing others for what you perceive is a bad review is not the way to go. Rather, you should try to act by example.
Of course, please don't critique other critiques. Doing that is not helpful to anyone.


Hey, what a good idea - I never thought of actually setting out to "critique other critiques".
It might be fun, but as you say, it wouldn't go anywhere. This view is purely personal, and I have been "acting by example" in my own critiques.

:P -ShadowTwit
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STAR WARS! :mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen: I can play almost all the Star Wars music on flute. :mrgreen:

Anyway...welcome to YWS! While I do agree about how everybody pays attention to everything EXCEPT the storyline, I also agree with Nate on this. Set an example. I would love to see something like that on Bubbles.
Critique for a critique, whatnot!
Welcome to YWS! Ja meta!
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Hey cool! I really like the Star Wars music, and the flute is my favourite instrument. What does the Imperial March sound like, I wonder? :D
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ShadowTwit wrote:Hey cool! I really like the Star Wars music, and the flute is my favourite instrument. What does the Imperial March sound like, I wonder? :D

Weird. Really weird. :D
F-F-F-Dflat-Aflat-Dflat-Aflat. :D
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Hehehe, no critiques of critiques! That would be bad. Instead, critique other stories the way you would like to be critiqued. Be a trend setter!

OMG. I haven't read Eragon yet, and I'm slightly afraid to. I didn't read LOTR (I suck) but if Eragon is worst than that... haha... yeah. Did I mention I suck? :P

Maybe I can bug you about celt history... I think I'm writing about them soon.
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Hallo!

I am astonished at your views, as it seems mine are quite similar! I too love 'The Lord of the Rings', (The books especially, though the movies are great too) 'Sherlock Holmes', and all things similar. Ever read 'The Chronicles of Narnia'?

I was terribly afraid I should never meet another fantasy lover who's disenchanted with 'Eragon'.... I'm afraid just a little of it stems from the fact that Paolini is published and I, alas, am not.

Your critisism on critisism is most interesting. At certain points I'm inclined to agree, but I'm sure setting an example is the best thing to do.

All the best,

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Yeah, I've read the Narnia books. They are good, the sort of books you can read and read and never get tired of. :)

I think Paolini only got published because his books are the stereo-typed fantasy that people want to read. After the success of LOTR and Star Wars, the publishers thought they'd do this book that had all those elements combined. Thinks me, anyway. :) You would have thought that they would have shrieked aloud in horror at Eldest though! I simply could not believe it when I read it. Still, I want to read the third book out of curiosity, beacuse having read the first two books of a trilogy makes me want to know what's in the third. I bet that Arya's gonna be the next Dragon Rider and the last egg will hatch for her. And I bet that Nasuada is going to be Eragon's sister, because then it would be like Luke and Leia, wouldn't it? The new prodigy's sister turns out to be a princess. :roll: :roll:

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HI!
I have to say I can see your point about critiques. However, not all of us are grumpy
people who take delight in putting down other people's work. If you don't like it, change it.




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i agree with you about critiques. i like hearing how they liked the story before you explain how horrible my grammar is. i'll try and critique some of your things if you like. :D
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Woah! People who aren't falling all over Eragon! Finally! I couldn't even finish it, and that's saying something, as usually my parents have to physically pry books out of my hungry fingers. And I loved LOTR. The movies were pretty epic, I guess, but I could've killed the director for tossing Tom Bombadil. I loved him. And BTW, I recognized a lot of those poetry scraps.

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