LSS: Starless Night OOC

Words and words and words.

Pretty words, though. Words infused with thunder or ice or love. Words that mean more than themselves.

I like that already.

Words that twist and tangle and embrace your heart. Words that squeeze and restrict. Words that flow and make you joyous. Words that evoke tears and rivers of sorrow.

But also words that dissolve the pain, ones that inflate your soul with hope. Words that fill your heart with dread. Words of violence and cruelty, words of kindness and sweet.

Posted, this brings the word count to 2754. Good job gang, let's keep it up

I love Enki. The only one other than Belinda and Darvi to use Darvi’s pronouns. Do we want to continue in the order we set? Me, Adri, then Chaser?

We might consider making an outline of who wants to move what plot pieces forward, just to keep the story going. The next one should be an attack on the caravan, so it'd make the most sense from Darvi or Rigel's perspective I think. Then it can shift to whoever's free at the time.

Alright! I’ll respond next then with Belinda and Darvi, then whoever makes it here first can respond.

Once our characters meet up I’d suggest writing in the pad to collaborate easier

That would be best.

Hello there. Congrats to all of us for getting that done on time. Personally, I'd think it would be wonderful to go in the same order.

My opinion (So take with a pinch of salt.):

Paragraph 1 (Each paragraph is a post. So AlmostImmortal's paragraph will be Darvi and Belinda's sections.): We're holding Darvi, but let's just say it. This guy is probably the worst criminal ever as far as they think so they are going to lie about the path! There will also be some type of interaction between Gemini! Gemini's island is full of forest! Does anyone not see what I'm thinking? We need to have them escape in Gemini so that someone knows the terrain, what luck are you going to have of them not getting caught if you're just wandering in circles? Nought. So I think that Darvi's part should be about remembering his experiences over the last few days and discussing with them their future. Belinda should find them, they would be walking along the path normally, about to start screaming when they feel eyes on them.

Paragraph 2: Then I have my paragraph of watching, talking to the Moon etc.

Paragraph 3: Enki shows up for his paragraph, asking questions etc.

Paragraph 4: Darvi and Belinda get into an argument and discussion about nobody really being there.

Paragraph 5: Rigel attacks them.

Obviously, it needs a bit of work. I'm not sure if you want to go another way... Just tell me.

Personally I think we could get a lot of mileage out of Rigel’s attack on the caravan. That would be what incites Darvi’s escape, probably so Rigel can let him run to an isolated area for a cleaner kill. So while our heroes find each other (maybe Belinda and Enki meet first, then Belinda knows some place that Darvi would run to if they were in danger) and then Rigel’s stalking them all the while, to attack once Darvi is helpless. Any character moments in between would be great as well, can’t think of any off the dome

I can write a bunch still about the Moon and Rigel. We just don't want the story to drag on. (We have a goal, but a nice book is good.) Of course, we can add a few extra posts, but I can only keep up Rigel doing half nothing for 2-4 posts.

I think Rigel would attack when they're having dinner, sitting around a fire or about to sleep. Darvi would be chained and need a hero to cut them off before they get killed.

Woo awesome job getting through that goal towards the last minute!! I knew yall could do it <3

@Chaser have you heard from @SpunkyMonkey?

hey there peeps! How's the writing going?