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LMS VI: Lunch Appointment with Death





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Hi CaptainJack!

I like the theme you have going on. As someone who loves tea and cats this has been really nice to read. When reading the poems I couldn't help but think of them in a children's book or something like that. I feel like they would pair nicely with some illustrations. They are very calming and remind of country life. Also, I like the way your poems resemble prose. The detail is really well done and I can really imagine the setting of each poem and the voices of each of the characters (besides the other husband because he hasn't spoken yet if I remember correctly). The speaker/narrator in these poems has a strong voice which is really nice too. All these things help the poems come to life.

Good luck with the rest of NaPo :)




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If you pick up a starving dog and make him prosperous, he will not bite you; that is the principal difference between a dog and a man.
— Mark Twain