"A good plot is like a dream.If you dont write down your dream on paper the moment you wake up,the chances are you'll forget it and it'll be gone forever"-Roald Dalh.
Hehehe... actually, believe or not I sort of liked this! Not for the first stanza, but the last two lines. It was cute, since the poem was so dramatic and then it dissolved into childish fragments. Which was cute.
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
You have the privilege of being my first post.
Although I thought your poem was out of place, I thought it was funny and it brought a smile to my face.
p.s. how about next time you take it a little more seriously. I'm not saying you have to lose your humor, but give the site the respect it deserves.
Yea- this kid is in it for attention and brad.
Just to let you know if you post anymore weird or random poems that don't really mean anything I won't say anything.
ConorR, I didn't understand your poem. Also, the words weren't very interesting. Using my thesaurus, I rewrote your poem using words I didn't know. Mine sounds like a spell.
The Conflagration Poem
Skirmishing holocaust
I facsimile chiffon!
Girdle of phlogiston!
Everyone lapse! ( gone )
This was fun.-London
"When Ajax strives some rock's vast weight to throw,
The line too labors, and the words move slow;" -Alexander Pope
I really don't know what to say to this, other than...no. While I was reading it, my face was permanently formed in a 'what the crap?!' expression. really, someone should have taken a picture--it was interesting.
I agree with above comments. We take our work seriously here at YWS. Please do the same or find another site to post on.
Go London Aspen for finding something positive to do with this! Nice idea, London! I think I'll try that next time I don't know what to think about a poem.
“It is one of life's bitterest truths that bedtime so often arrives just when things are really getting interesting.” - Lemony Snicket
"Skirmishing holocaust
I facsimile chiffon!
Girdle of phlogiston!
Everyone lapse! ( gone )"
London aspen, this made me laugh, it was actually strangely satisfying to read!
ConnoR, I think you should work on this a bit, put something more into it,
Did you even try when writing this?
