Fire

The fighting flames they burn my heart,
I gag and wish i never ate the poisend pie,
i wish i never enterd this ring of fire
now i will die in the fire.


that is the new version personally i think i could do better but i cant think of anything plz give ideas!

Uh,, ok...what were you on when you wrote that? LOL JK....Well ya interesting. I guess. O.o

i tried to update the poem but it went horribly wrong and i created a monster!!


i thought it was rubbish i just needed pepole's opinion thanks

from your local madman conorR

lmao, the idiot that clicked on www.pathetic.com>>>>>>> ME...
XD

Oh, this is my brother...
I don't know what he was thinking when he wrote it. Just trying to annoy Brad I guess. It made me laugh though..

OK, it wasn't exactly bad, but it wasn't [s]good[/s] average either. It really had almost nothing to do with fire either. And I'm not saying I don't like pie, but I can's say that it is in any way interesting. Also, what was with the

pie?...


beep?

It didn't really look like it should have been there. You could have made some kind of obvious break if it wasn't part of the [s]poem[/s] random assortment of words/letters, or removed some blank lines if it was.

It is certainly progressive.

I feel you have struck a chord. The humbly pastry is mentioned too scarcely in poetry! WHY?!?!?! hehehehe