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Hey there,please review:

Heroes of Aldrizhon: Return of the Banished (Prologue & Chapter 1)

If you have the time, could you review the second chapter as well? Thanks in advance!

Sure! I wouldn't mind at all. I'll review both Ch. 1 and Ch. 2 soon. If you look on my wall, I just rescued a kitten so I have to care for it right now but as soon as I clean him up and stuff, I'll get straight to it!

Hello there Eternity!
Can you please review, The Myth- Chapter one; Worst day ever.
I know that it already has a lot of reviews, but I'm hoping to re-write it, and I just need more ideas. Also, I'm hoping to show the first chapter to my English teacher, so I really need to make it better.

Thank you!!!!

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I saw the picture of the little kitten you rescued, sooo cute!!!! ^_^

Hello, dear. Of course!! I'll review it as soon as I can.

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awe thank you. gremlin is such a doll <3

Hi there ! I've just improved Chapter 1 of my story - could you please give me some advice?

Does it keep you hooked? Anything I could improve?

Thank you so much


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Lauren

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Could you maybe review my short story "Clawing stroke"?

Clawing Stroke

I wrote it a while ago and I want to improve it.
Thanks in advance!

Legitimately, I am going to review everything I possibly can for this RD.

Request a review below, and I will get started! My goal for RD is 75 well-written reviews, so the more the better!

I have the exordium for my low fantasy epic published, as well as the first three chapters. Don't go easy on me.

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns

Sally - Chapter One of Shattered Crowns

Wylfred - Chapter Two of Shattered Crowns

The Duchess - Chapter Three of Shattered Crowns

Amazing! I will get to those ASAP for RD! Thank you! @CarryOnMrCaulfield

Hey there, could you please review the prologue and first chapter of my fantasy action/adventure story?

Magik: Search for the Tome (Prologue &amp; Chapter 1)

Thanks in advance!

Hey there, Eternity! I'm Alex, a Resources/Community moderator on YWS.

This is a message just to let you know that I have locked and archived this thread due to inactivity (of more than two years). We do this to keep the forum organized and make it more likely for the writers and poets to get the feedback they seek. If you'd like to reopen this thread at any point in the future, please contact me or any other resources moderator and we'd be more than happy to reopen it for you! Thank you for volunteer service to reviewing so far, we really appreciate it.

Good day!