LordZeus wrote:@TinyJarStoredDreams Great post! just a couple of things I'd like you to change please. You mentioned Erik puffing out his chest as he asked if she had a light saber, but he wouldn't do that. He's not that kind of person. Perhaps it would be better if you said that he looked at her curiously as he asked if she bad a lightsaber. You see, he's 18, past the child stage so that last thing doesn't fit him.
Also, towards the end of your post you said that the kids were in awe. Well, Erik isn't really a kid as he is 18 (albeit with a great sense of daring and fun). Also, he travelled loved the galaxy for 7 years and has seen lightsabers and fights with them before. So, although Ro would probably looked awed, Erik would look wary (which is what he would feel). Could you please change that?
In any case, great post! I can't wait to see more of how our characters interact!
Name: Ilyana Tahren Fidsmor
Age: Early- to mid-thirties
Race: Human
Appearance: Tall and pale, with dark auburn hair. They were once hazel, but since totally embracing the Dark Side of the Force, the pupils are entirely yellow. Has several facial tattoos, acquired after her return to the Legion.
Personality: Unnervingly calm one moment, and violently angry at another. Has trouble containing her emotions, and often uses this to her advantage.
History: A gifted Force-adept, Ilyana Tahren was taken by the Legion at a young age. (Her parents were cooperative, and so their lives were spared.) Ilyana was conditioned to serve the Sith with unconditional devotion.Many years later, Ilyana took part in a raid against a Jakku village, in hopes of acquiring an apprentice of her own. She discovered that her sister and Force-sensitive nephew, Erikenai, were living there. Another Sith struck down her sister, who requested with her dying breath that Ilyana care for her child.
Angry at the Sith for having harmed her family, Ilyana deserted the Legion, and self-induced amnesia in hopes that she could forget her traumatic past.
The amnesiac Ilyana met a handsome young smuggler, Grin Fidsmor, and his co-pilot at the Niima Outpost, and asked them to ferry her and her nephew off the planet on their freighter, the Jade Star.
Ilyana ended up staying aboard the Jade Star, Fidsmor's freighter, for an extended period of time, and became close with the captain. They married, and she bore him a daughter, Roenna, who inherited her Force sensitivity.
Eventually, Ilyana's memories returned. She felt she couldn't resist the Dark Side's pull, and resolved to return to the Legion. She left with Erik and her Force-adept baby. In the end, she left Erik on Coruscant with a capable family, since her sister wouldn't have wanted him to join the Dark Side.
She dismissed her time away from the Legion with Grin as reckless infatuation, and absorbed herself solely in the pursuit of mastery over the Dark Side of the Force.
(Eventually, Grin and his co-pilot Jasek tracked Ilyana and the baby down, and stole Roenna away.)
Lightsaber description: Red, with an intricately detailed copper handle. She used to use a second violet blade, but left this behind on the Jade Star by mistake.
Family/friends: Sister, deceased; Erikenai Stone, nephew; Grin Fidsmor, estranged spouse; Roenna Fidsmor, daughter.
Occupation: Sith of the Legion
Rank: Saber/Knight
Up for Love: Not really. Technically, she's still married to Grin. He'd have to die (or formally divorce her, but she'd much rather kill him) before she could enter another romantic relationship in good conscience. Her superiors in the Legion don't know about her marriage, and have tried unsuccessfully to betroth her to other compatible acolytes.
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