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Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I am not going to complain about anything! This was fantastic. First of all, good work on the first introductory part. I just ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) Hope you are enjoying yourself already. I will have to be honest here, this does not really strike me as a chapter because ...

Hello there :) I thought I would do the honours. Firslty, next time you post your writings, try to separate everything accordingly so that it makes it easier to read ...

Hello there :) I thought I'd do the honours. I liked this a lot. I like your writing style. The problem I had with this is that you tend to ...

Hello there :) This was very long so I managed to read some of it. From the bit that I read, there were some spelling errors but they were not ...

Hello there :) Interesting topic. I thought that this poem lacked a lot of emotion, if it's not emotion then it's that spark to make it original. I think this ...

Hello there :) Wow, I loved this. I felt the pouncing of "power" in every sentence. I have nothing to correct so I'll just comment. I agree, some people if ...

Hello there :) I thought that I'd do the honours “What are you ladies after today?” Celia crossed her arms and said “We need light weight traveling food.” The man ...

Hello there :) I thought that your poem lacked a lot of punctuation and so it was very hard to make out what you were trying to say at times; ...

Hello there :) I agree with borntobeawriter, your first paragraph is just excellent. I loved the way you wrote it and great imagery so to speak. I thought you did ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So, I found this a bit unflattering. You seemed to confuse your tenses a lot and it was distracting. For example I’m pretty ...

Hello there :) I only managed to read some of this so I thought I'd do the honours. Dumping the body of the unconscious beautiful vampire onto the couch. This ...

Hello there Munchkinzizzles (interesting username :) ) Anyways, I thought that I'd do the honors in reviewing this. I honestly thought that there was a lot of dialogue in this. ...

Hello there blackbird12 :) To be honest, I found this a bit confusing at first. But you know what, this is a great poem. I liked the depth and how ...

Hello there FireandIce and welcome to YWS, I hope you like it here. I thought that this was a very witty, creative poem to a honest. It showed a lighter ...