ziggiefred

Hello there and since you are relatively new, welcome to YWS! :) The previous reviewer pretty much said what I wanted to say, well some of the things. This was ...

Hello there :) I just like your writing style, it's good. Firstly though, I think that next time before you submit something make sure your work is spaced because everything ...

Hello there Jane. :) I must have missed this when you submitted it. I liked the subtlety of the story, the way you set the mood was very calming. I ...

Hello there :) Wow, this is very well written. I like your writing style, it makes events very vivid because you describe them well. You also had a great story ...

Hello there Horseradishcares :) This was an interesting poem, full of emotion, I enjoyed it a lot. Although sometimesI thought you were going in circles, especially in this stanza I ...

Hello there :) Yuriiko has already given you quite a review, so I'll just give a quick comment. I think the way you tell your story is very informal. It ...

Hello there :) Sodapop already gave you a great review so I'll try my best. This paragraph is just too big, I noticed this trend of gigantic paragraphs through out ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I thought that this was a very touching poem and I liked it. I liked it because I can relate to it and ...

Hello there :) A paramore fan, yay! Anyway, back to business. I will be honest, I thought this poem was not satisfying. It was kind of bland and without emotion ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I think love is a wide topic and you kind of chose the predictable normal route that I see over and over. Like ...

Hello there :) This is definitely a different topic from what I see every day. It was a start. I think though that it was not the most creative approach ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I thought I'd do the honours;) Except for how it was puffy like a n allergic reaction to a wasp sting. Walking out ...

Hello there :) I will just outline a few problem areas I dropped the body on the ground with a thud . I have a problem with this sentence. The ...

Hello there :) Interesting story you have here. I'll first outline the problem areas. I love the first paragraph, you describe things well and you have great use o imagery. ...

Hello there :) I thought that I would do the honours My uniform was stuck to my back with sweat, (maybe you could try "from") Another thing I should think ...