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Hello there :) The sea was clear and you could see the animals swimming down beneath. I want to know more. Add a little more about the sea to create ...

Hello there :) I really think this was very good. I liked how it was straight forward or to the point. I would not change a thing about it. However, ...

Hello there :) This is a very deep poem. Firstly, I liked your use of imagery, you were able to paint very vivid pictures in my head. The second thing ...

Hello there :) Now I stand on the sidelines , watching my best friend destroy his life. I have been friends with Nate since we were in preschool. Back then ...

Hello there :) BOBBY RAY's mouth drops open and the diary fall from his fingertips. SARAH BOBBY RAY you know were not supposed to be out here, I really don't ...

Hello there :) Nicely done. I liked the fact that you kept a consistent mood through out the poem, a sort of subtle mood. I did not like the last ...

Hello there :) I finally made it. I'm not going to say much because the previous reviewers have already touched what I wanted to say. I think that your story ...

Hello there :) I always truly believed it was selfish, really , I did. I was one of the most against suicide people you could meet. Rephrase this sentence, it ...

The nation Jinglio was controlled by one person, on the very top of the jinarchy, the jingy. All he wanted was one thing, to destroy all the jingos on the ...

Hello there TheModernist and welcome to YWS! :) Woow, I liked this a lot. First of all, this was very deep, the meaning as well. I liked the quirkiness of ...

Hello there Forever Threnody :) . I would call this piece very intelligent! I liked it a lot. The first paragraph was very well crafted and let's just say, as ...

Hello there Hockeyfan and welcome to YWS! :) First of all, next time you should make sure your work is spaced, this is just too much. Secondly, you seem to ...

Hello there Wow, this is pretty good. At first I was a bit unsure with you repeating "I'm being" within the first two lines, but it flowed really well after ...

Hello there Darkness still prevailed, a cloak hanging in the air, but light pierced through some places. Enough light to allow some sight, however incomplete. This is very confusing, especially ...

Hello there Jane :) I stopped at Fast Mart and got a bag of M&Ms, then hid behind a couple of trees and cried for a few minutes. Your main ...