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ZOMG, you lost your jump drive? Yikes, that sucks. That's why I'm scared to use one to back up LoSLoR... I might just die if I lost all that typing. ...

Also a great chapter, and personally, I like how everything isn't made obvious right away. It makes the reader have to give things a moment of thought, which can only ...

*gasp* Another story from Razor! Must read! I love your first sentence, it's a great hook into the story. The narration constantly made me laugh, you did a great job ...

Wow, this is a really good first chapter. It really drew me in, and I can't wait to read the next one! I loved the imaginary newspaper headline, and the ...

Very good job, it was an intriguing opener. We get a sense of your main character right away, which I love. I also love your opening sentence, it's a great ...

Stella’s right, this should probably be moved to fantasy fiction, but I haven’t the authority to do that, either. In any case, please space your paragraphs! It makes things easier ...

Wonderful. This was really, really good. I loved... well, all of it really. The dialouge, the characterization, everything. There wasn't much happening, I suppose, but in the immortal words of ...

Review for chapter One: Swords grated against stones, to be plunged into flesh at dawn. That's an awesome sentence. Love it. I had destroyed my widowed mother through my actions. ...

Wow, I really like this. Emma does seem like an interesting character, and I'd love to hear more about her, but it rocks just the way it is, too. By ...

Nice beginning! I think you did a really good job of getting straight to the point, to the action, when it mattered, and this shows a lot of promise. I ...

Hm. Not badly done. I like your narrative voice in this piece. It helps us get to know your character quickly. The John of CIPHER is rather a step up ...

Hey there! Nice job. I like this concept, and Kissermiortok cracks me up. The story seemed interesting and I can't wait to find out what happens next, and get an ...

I love this contest! Your entry really made me laugh. Truly brilliant. My favorite part was the first paragraph, where it was going on about her "battle." XDD ...I can't ...

Hey, um, I'll gladly review it, but I'm having trouble finding part 1 in your portfolio... there seem to be several threads there titled "Songwood," and I can't figure out ...

Nice opening! I rather like this, Anne is an easy character to relate to, and this time you did a nice job of letting us get into her head. You ...