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  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: All of the Stars

    This was great. I love how the words flowed with the music. It was different; good different. Very emotional. I loved the romantic engagement at the end. He obviously loves ...

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Loss, part III

    Oooo! This is getting good. How mysterious! I like the fact that Gaby has started to question, causing Damien/Will to give us more background on what happened to Denise. It ...

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Loss, part II

    Hey! It's me again. This was good. I like the storyline. However, there's a few things you may want to watch out for. First, I wasn't sure whether Damien was ...

    Oct 11, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Loss, part I

    Hey! It's Dinkeroo! Sorry it took me so long. I got sick, and it turned out to be the flu. Blah. It wasn't fun. Anywho... On to the critique! I ...

    Oct 10, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Break Up: The Percfect Guy

    Great begining! I loved the way you let us relate to the main character first before dropping the "new guy" bomb! That was really effective. Also, I like how you ...

    Oct 1, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Mother, May I?

    Youreit here, ready to review! This was a very interesting piece. I liked the forbidden love, and I thought you displayed that very well. Bethany is a very interesting character, ...

    Sep 29, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Lier Is A Simple Explanation

    I liked this piece. It was easy to relate to. I think most girls have had at least one guy like her only for what she looks like, and this ...

    Sep 27, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: To Be Like Jesus

    This sent chills down my spine. Literally. I loved the last line, and the way you made the last line separate was perfect. I can't tell you much that could ...

    Aug 26, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Let Me Love You(11)

    A baby? I guess I should've seen this coming, but whatever. You wrote this well. I enjoyed it. Her reaction seems fairly realistic. I have absolutely no experience with this ...

    Aug 11, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Let Me Love You(10)

    Aww! How romantic! Although I was expecting a ring... A necklace is nice, too, though. It just would have been sweeter if he was proposing. I loved the way you ...

    Aug 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: House of Shadows - Chap. 1

    I really liked it, and I disagree with the people above me who said it was paced too fast. I think that it was just right, and I liked the ...

    Jul 3, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The novel- ch.8

    I liked this chapter. I enjoyed the whole good vs. evil thing that you have going. But I do agree with Maddy that she should have showed more emotion. Other ...

    Jul 2, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: What if...

    This piece was very interesting. I felt like it could have been an excerpt from a novel, almost as if you pulled it out of the middle of the story. ...

    Jun 30, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The novel- ch.7

    You did an absolutely amazing job with that chapter! Wow! I'm still reeling from it. I loved the twist that turned this whole story upside down! I never in a ...

    Jun 30, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The novel- ch.6

    I enjoyed this chapter. I think you portrayed the feeling that a girl gets when she loves someone who is completely wrong for her, but can't understand why wonderfully. It ...

    Jun 30, 2009


It's hard to enjoy practical jokes when your whole life feels like one.
— Rick Riordan, The Last Olympian