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Youreit here again! I liked this part, but I think you're moving a bit fast. I wouldn't invite a guy over to my house the day after I met him. ...

You're grammer had some mistakes, but I think those could be overlooked if your story had more meat to it. I have nothing against short stories, and I've written lots ...

Youreit here, and ready to help! Welcome to YWS! It's helped me a lot with my writing to get an outsider's opinion, and I think you will benefit as well. ...

I liked the suspense at the end. You left the reader with a great cliff hanger, which makes me want to read me. I think that the breakup should've been ...

I loved this! Your writing style is extremely unique. You made a heavy topic of lost love and suicide into something delicate and beautiful. I don't have any criticism for ...

I liked this story. It's very fitting for the way the economy is right now. You did a great job showing and not telling. I noticed that you threw a ...

youreit here, and although editing isn't my favorite thing in the world to do, I read the first sentence of your story and couldn't go on without fixing it for ...

Hey there! Well, I'm not much one for nit-picky stuff, so I'll just let you know what I thought. First, I read a lot of stuff on YWS, usually just ...

Hey! It's youreit, here to do my little reviewing thing! Okay, first of all, there were way too many run-ons. If people can't understand the first paragraph of your writing, ...

Hey there! It's Dink! I loved the flashback, and this is pretty intriguing. I think everybody else got the nitpicks, so I'm going to just give you a few suggestions. ...

I like the bad boy character of Theo, and the way Cierra helps her brother around. It gives her a motherly personality and makes me think that maybe she's going ...

Sorry. My computer glitched and sumbited the message before I told it to. Part One: I liked the strength of Kaela and the way you made their breakup so realistic. ...

Hey! I don't have any nit picks, because that's not really my thing, but I just wanted to let you know that I thought this was great. To make it ...

This could be good, but only if you expand it properly. Sure, you've got a good begining paragraph, and you seem to have a great voice from what you gave ...

*Cue applause* This was really good. The only thing I saw that could be improved was to maybe add a bit more description. But other than that, this was amazing. ...