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Re: What ill, what hope, what?
Hey, Young here. Don't worry, we all make mistakes! But I'll point out a few of yours for now! ;) "The Darkness done an evil deed." Try, "The Darkness did ...
Oct 31, 2011 -
Re: The Window
I like it, cause it sort of keeps you hanging... But I have a few things to say. 1. You keep cutting it off, were there should probably be something. ...
Oct 24, 2011 -
Re: Forever Broken
Hi! I really liked it, the much I read. You kind of lost me there. I couldn't really even finish it. But the little I read, you had quite a ...
Oct 24, 2011 -
Re: Mirror Mirror on the wall, who is the fairest one of all?
That was great Spark! It has a good message about it. That no one is better than another. That there is none "fairest of all". It also proves that someone ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Love IS a game
That was slightly disturbing, but really awsome! It needs a little revising, but other than that, it was perfect. The stanza were you describe their beauty that draws you in, ...
Oct 19, 2011