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Thank you for that! It was very helpful. Yeah, I used spell checker but any other typos are because I didn't have much time to write this down. (Evil parents, ...

That was flippin creepy. You had me fooled there till the end which made me laugh. Really good though! I liked it.

It was good. I really liked it. Very romantic. I'm glad your friend told you to post it. Good choice. :)

I agree. It's quite a beautiful poem. Great imagery as every one else has said. But the one thing I have to say that bugged, me was that there was ...

That is a very beautiful poem. Nothing wrong with it in my eyes. I really liked this.

Yes, its a good poem but I have to agree with Rose here. There are waaaayyyy too many agains. It got really annoying and repetetive. Maybe if you only put ...

Wow. that's interesting. i can kinda see where you got that from. Hmm... thats funny though.

Looks like I must explain "scree." It's always been in my vocabulary... it must be one of those regional things. It's like scream but not so screechy and rough. It's ...

OMG! thats brilliant! hahaha! thats a cool song though, one of my favorites coincedentally.... you should do something with the rest of the verses then to make it longer. just ...

Well, it's meant to be kind of mysterious. I'm trying to get you to guess what the cool buzz is from, what the crisp black lines are, etc. I like ...

Ummm... no, not to my knowledge at least. I got it from a computer game I was obsessed with 3 years back. This pirate walks into a restaurant where the ...

I like the topic. Do you know or is it about TLW? Just wondering.... But yeah the repetitiveness of "I'll wait for you...will you wait for me" got a little ...

Yeah, it was mean to be just kind of random and pointless. :P

Yeah, this isn't that bad. I think it's pretty good. I like emotion_less's way of describing it dull, like ho-hum, not dull as in boring, that's good. I don't really ...

I like this. Although I agree with Duskglimmer, you should break up your lines somehow, and fix your spelling. Your text is good you just need to fix the formatting.