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You and I have butterfly dreams. Teach me how to metamorphose. ( this line seems to interupt the flow of the poem) as its a imperative, where as the rest ...

In my garden, flowers were like friends; with their sultry bodies, up-turned heads simmering in the bitter acrid air. But then; the plague came. when i read flowers were like ...

Quite an intersting narrative style poem Last night I told the stars to go away and can you believe it? They listened. These lines kind of broke the flow of ...

I really loved the whimsical feeling in this poem and loved the flow of it, tats seems to bring back memories and the lines a winter wind and withered kiss ...

Wow it took me twice reading it to capture the meaning, the first cause i was a bit confused. Through it flowed really well, and yet seems to effortless carry ...

finished reading all the chapters and want to say i throughly enjoyed it so far, kinda of reminds me of the twilight series, as for this chapter, it does seem ...

I started reading your story today and loved it so far. I love the undercurrents of romance, relationships in the pack thats developing, and the balance of both human and ...

hmmn quite an intense and cynical poem, well i did find it powerful althrough i'd never agree with the messages that comes through, i mean if we all turn to ...

Hey Kim it's going along nicely.Intersting how even the strongmen have to use humans as pawns. Its like all the main characters are the invisible bystanders of this game. More ...

Hey Kim, love the way your action flowed in this chapter, the tension during the battle sceans are really good. Through during the begging half of the chapter, I think ...

I like how the plot is developing. Some suggestions: Aronn was getting ancy just observing. ancy is not a work, you mean anxious? They took away hope and blinded the ...

nice writing Kim, I love the ideas your developing about how only we humans can banish the demons. I really love it how the names of the demons seem to ...

Hey Kim again, still following your story, love the angel theme, btw is this a flash back or did they go back or something? I dont really get this, I ...

Actually I like description of sceenary, I mean its the detail that really capture the reader into relating with the character. The line The night air was crisp as was ...

Hey Kim again, I'm reading your story again, and procrastinating from studying. I'll finish this review then go back to studying, and read the rest later. Its good how you ...