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hi kitty after being back after a year. wow such a beautiful poem. Some of the imagary you used were particular effective and lovely and I liked the way you ...

hey kj, great chapter, so filled with passion. came back to review after months of inactive, this is actually one of the pieces from yws that i actually remember and ...

I thought it was a lovely poem, the kind that takes me twice to read to get the meaning, maybe because of the structure? Through I loved the last lines ...

Hi I liked the way you described the pain, down to gory details :wink: and the simple touches, that a single special person could free you, as your troubles are ...

That was beautiful, It was short sweet, and honest. Even when I read the intro it was already feeling sad, and it is a good tribute to your friend. The ...

When I was reading it it seemed like a soilder poem, and then by the final lines i realised it was about a pig.. which is a good twist. They ...

I like the poem as I can relate to the feelings of impaitence to grow, and some intersting memories or background, especially when we're young, we tend to have more ...

wow that was such a powerful story, Initially I thought it was something innocent like the beeping of a watch or alarm of some kind, until i realised it was ...

She is my aunt who has taken me in for now. She's old, with wrinkled skin and white hair that is in one long braid. (braid isnt that strong of ...

I think the verse lengths the previous parts of the story was better written, In this one some of the parts has become mellowed, I kind of edited to make ...

I quite liked how the free verse is coming along and here's some suggestions. What's it supposedly mean? change to what's it supposed to mean? Who aren't really my true ...

Wow I really loved this free verseb fiction, unique way of writing it, that I havnt seen before. I especially liked Did I really have wavy ash blond hair and ...

After the rain the world is new The flowers bloom to view - The scenery. the last two lines don't flow very well, as in the rest of the poem ...

that was such a beautiful and exquisite poem. I just loved the way it flowed off the lines, it had intersting and suprising breaks of the lines but yet made ...

Wow I really loved this story. It really touched me an I can understand how family members seem to always have a favourite, and just criticise some things, which when ...