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The third stanza has two typos in two and four. '"ment" should be "meant" Also for line 3, "i hated you" might flow better than "i hate you". i like ...

nicee.. ^^ i like your rhythm but it gets a bit hard to find in the last two lines of your poem. its great though. X) - Jazi

thanks for all your comments and suggestions. ^^ i can change the punctuation a bit but im a bit lost as to how to change the overall rhythm so i'll ...