xwritingprincess21x

Hey, I have many questions for you. First of all, you mentioned Melody was sixteen at the time of the suicide, which made it seem that the death occurred many ...

You have this line "...when there was still so much to be done." and then you talk about how "everything had been accomplished," so its kind of confusing but it ...

Hey, I thought this was pretty good. I did not want to stop reading it. I think it would look cute in real life. If you were to expand it ...

This is very well written, however I wouldn't reccommend using semicolons and colons in some of the spots you used them in. But you introduced the story nicely. I liked ...

The garden had wilted. Dried leaves, hanging off browning stems seemed almost forgotten in their misery, as they turned towards Gloria and sighed at her gardener’s gloves, slowly removed from ...

These stories are so touching. I could not have written them any better. I really think you have a lot of potential as a writer because your word choice is ...

In this poem the picture the words painted, to me, was more important than the actual meaning. Choosing white over black to signify death is unique and creative, but doesn't ...

You used to be my dearest friend, The one I told my secrets too. I thought we'd always be together, You used to be the one I loved, The one ...

This is great! It is so packed with meaning in every single word. The part about acid scars was really intense, in fact, the entire poem was really intense. I ...

This piece of work really portrays someone's feelings..whether they be directly yours or someone else's. However, I thought it was strange for the guy to be in that position and ...