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hmmm...okay, so I was trying hard to make it rhyme...but i like my poems to rhyme...ill try it againwith out the rhyme! x

thanks looby-lou im lgad oyu likes it and thanks for the advice phorcys

thansk...i know it was rubish, and im not an expert at poetry(stories ar emy best thing) or suicide, it was a kind of a spur of the moment thing, you ...

Sorry i didn't really understand it I thought it was a bit pointless...sorry!

The next day in the house... the housemates are paired together to complete a task, Danny is given a list of the teams... 'The teams are Libby and Eve Ade ...

Cheryl turned her back on Charlotte... not that she cared much, she couldn't wait to see what everyoen else thought of Charyl's evil little plan! 'Oh... and Charlotte...maybe now that ...

PART 2........ Cheryl looked Charlotte in the eye and shook her head, 'What people want to see is a bit of conflict, so let's give them a good time...' Charlotte ...

thanks for the comments, i will try and post the other version; in my opinion it's alot better than this one! thanks!

yeah there are still some spelling mistakes, but that was good, I'm a big HP fan and am also writing a story based on it. I thought it was really ...

that reminds me of a peom iv read before, dont know where, bt its good!has anything like it been done before, you know with some of the same lines, or ...

this is good, it is good as a poem and would be good as asong! keep it up!