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I don’t believe for one second that they are in love, and that’s my biggest problem. The way Scarlet describes him is so materialistic. It seems the only thing she ...

Sorry, but I was a bit bored. It was nearly a whole page of “Corey. Go Away! Corey. Shut Up! Corey. I’m not talking to you! Corey. Go Away! Corey. ...

First of all, I don’t know much about Greek mythology. I don’t know how to tell what parts of your story are based on mythology, or of your own imagination, ...

I was confused about the power thing too. For his 16th birthday, is his gift supposed to be some kind of superpower? Or am I totally off track? XD Also, ...

Another good chapter! I used to like Issac’s character until now. At first, I thought he was in his 20’s- like maybe 23-26 years old. But 33!!! Woah, that’s just ...

Here's my two cents, thanks for listening :) You did a good job on this, the only problem I had was that I didn’t really connect with your characters. I ...

Loved it!! Although I have to admit I think I’ve known what Ayden was since the last chapter. I think she’s that wolf in Kara’s dream, and that either she ...

Wow I’m really loving this story!! Your main character is great, and I can totally relate to her :) The relationships are very well done, and I like how each ...

It was a little weird for me. The whole time I was reading this I had this big cheesy performance playing in my head. It was your typical aggressive jerk ...

I honestly didn’t know what you were talking about for the first few paragraphs. The electronic desk, or whatever it was, had me really confused. I mean, what’s the point ...

It was a little weird that your main character is so intelligent, and when you have her talk to us, she sounded kind of like a stupid teenager. With the ...

I really like the story you have going here! Alien invasions are always exciting. I like all of your characters, but I think you can do a better job of ...

I like how you said the mom’s hair was all messy and tangled and everything was in disarray. It adds to the atmosphere of the desperate times your characters are ...

This was definitely too short for me. How did these people emerge? What are they? How did we get destroyed? It just feels like you started out saying ‘well, our ...

Hey there! I thought this was a great story; too bad you hit a rut! I come across the same problem when I write; I make about 5 chapters and ...