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Hey Smurf! I haven't been around here for like ever, but when I logged on today I stumbled across this and I'm glad I did. I love Effie's name, and ...

Hey there, wordsandwishes! I don't usually tend to read or write prologues, but I'm glad I clicked on this one. I liked the format. It was different, having it almost ...

Hey there, UpandOut! I'm not very good at reviewing prologues but I'll do my best to help. 'Excitedly smiling, he leads me' - This reads awkwardly. Try - 'Smiling excitedly' ...

Hey there, Dreaming! Welcome to YWS! I don't want to repeat anything that's already been said, because Cadi has already given you a great review, so my review is going ...

Hey there, firepen! This is pretty short, even for a short story. It's not really clear what the main plot of this story is. I'm guessing it's that the MC ...

Hey there, thatboy! For a first chapter, not much happened to really hook the readers interest. That being said, the way you set the scene did it for me. Although ...

Hey there, blue! Welcome to YWS! Now, I've read a few stories that follow this theme. Someone who is so desperate to escape something that they end up taking thier ...

Hey there, yubbies! This is rather short, so my review isn't going to be of great length. So first off, I'd strongly recommend that you give this story a title, ...

Hey there, cnrobins! Welcome to YWS! This is a pretty dramatic story. A girl finds out her parents aren't really her parents. I think you describe some of the emotions ...

Hey there, ahhhsmusch! I really liked this. It was short. Just a little scene where two boy-men, I pictured teenagers ageing around 19 - 21, discussed their days. The structure ...

Hey there Ignorance! I don't have time for a proper review, but I'll give you my overall thoughts. Really, I thought this was going to be a tale of popular ...

Hey there! The whole 'Apple' thing and the dark hair and creepy smile made me think of Snow White, even though the was nothing like it. Weird. Anyway, your grammar ...

Hey there! Seeing as this is the first piece you've written in a while, I'm going to do my best to give you my thoughts. So, firstly, I think you've ...

Hey there, Elo! 'Sheriff Hollister reached over switched on the radio.' - There should be 'and' after 'over' 'a dull growl as the' 'The Sheriff shifted to a growling second ...

Hey there EloquentDragon! You reviewed a piece of my work the other day, so I'd like to return the favour. I'll try my best to give you a helpful review. ...