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Hello I'll be your reviewer I'm LastPaladin, I'll warn you straight off, I'm extremely harsh, but this is all meant as a way to improve you and only meant to ...

Wow, thank you :smt003

I like this the way it is already. Good job :)

You did a good job on this, it actually has changed my views on abortion.

I changed the words a little, tell me what you think. :xd:

I like this the way it is, the simplicity and the solitude set the mood. But I do agree with everyone else that it could use some more emotion.

I like the meaning of this, but some parts are confusing. It sounds like in some places there are people talking, and if it is supposed to be that, put ...

It confused me, I didn't really figure out the meaning. I think you should put in punctuation, other than that I liked it, and the winter imagery is good. :)

You did a great job writing this. I've written sonnets before, too, and I'm not that good at it lol. I love the way you used imagery so well.

I like this! I can really relate to it, too. The only thing you need to do to improve it is fix the grammar and capitalize the i's. :]

I love the vocabulary you use; the only word I don't know the meaning to is verdigris. This is a really good poem :]

Thanks for the advice, I'm glad you liked it x] I had to write it for my creative writing class