writewannabe

Just when it got good, it ends! Well I hope you come back to add more to it. I am dying to find out what the girls were laughing at. ...

I like this. It can either be left the way it is-it is perfect for those short flash fiction pieces. It also can be expanded into a goo sized book. ...

This is very well written and I hope that you have expanded on this story. I honestly could not find any type, spelling or gramma mistakes. This is impressive for ...

This is very well written. However, a bit confusing Who is Diego? I am guessing that he is a wolf and has a pack of followers Also, what are the ...

You set the setting for this story perfectly in the first few paragraphs of the story. Excellent use of imagery and description. The two characters Rayne and Peter fit into ...

John's father was a priest in the old Roman Catholic Church. Is his father a Roman catholic priest? If he is you may have to change it. catholic Priests do ...

I hope you are still writing since this was written in 2005. The frist two paragraphs were very descriptive and most readers will be able to visualize the rest of ...

Okay this is very well written and I hope that you did continue with this, since this was written several years ago. I am not going to mention anything about ...

Another great read. Maybe the only suggestion, agreeing with another poster, is to have your MC have another encounter with Eric before going on the adventure. Maybe break this chapter ...

This is from another review Dad should not be capitalized. I disagree with it because, in my opinion Mom and Dad are proper names. Maybe I am wrong. A good ...

“Alert, we have a breech, I repeat, we have a breech! This may be a run-on sentence. It may be better to read as “Alert, we have a breech! I ...

This is a very good poem. Maybe not a sonnet like that guy who wrote Romeo and Juliet. But from start to finish it flowed very smoothly. I did not ...

OKAY this is a submission that was done in 2004. I wonder if you are still around to read reviews. This was very good and well-wriitten. Not to mention that ...

This is very well-written. It reminds me of the Max Ride series. Maybe you can add more to this and make it into a novella or maybe even a Novella. ...

This is from another comment "A very wordy paragraph, with heavy description! Cut back a lot of it; the way I see it you could mush this into three sentences ...