writerwithacause

Wow, this was such a great poem! I shall like it! Punctuation's perfect, grammar -- flawless, and your style is great! My favourite part was the beginning: The diamond girl ...

Broken pens , Screwed up paper , Wrist cramps . Frustration ! Sore bum , Sore eyes , Aching back , Aching thighs . -- I loved these first two ...

I miss you. I hate how it’s true. I love you. The words I wish I didn’t feel. -- nice stanza, simple yet beautiful. I hunger for you. The feeling ...

Hello, Dreamwalker! I enjoyed reading your poem. It was an easy read, and pleasant too. I've had a look at what other users said, in order not to repeat myself. ...

Hey, ultraviolet! This was such a great read! I loved your association of the process of writing (marked by the word "ink") with different human emotions, present in every stanza, ...

And I saw such majesty in her eye That I could not look away from her; Such splendor, such brilliance was the sea That I felt I would burst with ...

Dramatic indeed! What a profound poem I spit out bullets and suck in lives, I create orphans and widowed wives. I am a tool of human desperation, You begin straight ...

La noche La noche Dreams, No, dreams aren't for the satisfied, those in love with what's real, those not clinging to the paraphernalia of time, -- hm, not sure if ...

I will begin by saying that the way yu end your lines and start new ones is, in my opinion, wonderful and original. The only suggestion of mine (feel free ...

I have fled from the path, That I long knew was right. I have chosen to descend -- perhaphs that it is a better word? And not to arise. (start ...

I don't have many suggestions when it comes to your poem, but I think you should separate this into three stanzas. Here is how I'd personally do it: Life is ...

You made me feel I was the only one , You were my prince, to you I' run . I felt so safe when you were there . Truth is ...

A heart, a soul, from somewhere near ... I wish for what I cannot hear . I bear the thought that's deep inside That sometimes one can never hide. This ...

You can try to break me, Point out all my flaws And try to tell me That I'm not strong enough to fight. You can try to break me , ...

Freedom is a golden falcon, soaring in the clear blue sky, pushing itself higher and higher, until the falcon and earth have no tie. Freedom is a onyx stallion, tearing ...