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Okay, thanks. I'll get to work on that!

Thanks so much, again. You just seem to take my concerns right out of my mouth!

Thank you very much! I understand your characterization point and was afraid of that myself. How would you suggest I bring out more of Zaila's personality? I struggle with personifying ...

Thank you so very much! It does tie in to the other chapters eventually!

Thank you so much! This really means a lot to me.

Awesome! I'm glad I helped. It certainly was a mystery so keep up the good work! :D

Hahaha! Thanks so much for your feedback.

Actually, Uncle Charlie is her Grandfather's best friend. She just calls him that! We're not there yet but her Grandfather is gone(Not missing. Not dead.) and her parents were killed ...

Absolutely! I'll get to work on that.

Thank you very much! I thought that if I had described the watches more at that moment it would stiffen up the flow of the action. Where would you put ...

Thanks so much, Myth! It really means a lot to me.

This is great Myth! Your characters really pop and this storyline just draws me in. I can't seem to find anything wrong with it. I would say just be sure ...

Thank you so much!! I can't wait to post more of it!

Thank you so much! I will certainly work on these things.

Hi there! Freya here for a review. Let's just jump on in shall we? I love the way you're going with this. I'm not relating to any of the characters ...