whence

For a first poem... It shows a level of workability, I suppose. I suggest this: Read. A lot. of poems, that is. I'm constantly reading, and thus constantly learning, new ...

Ahh...this piece could've been so much more. I think you could integrate ambiguity wonderfully here. For instance, you out-right say 'It spits out my new portrait'. Instead, you could've left ...

never be...what? Overall, it was rather cliched and simplistic Yes, yes... 'no one understands me! *slits wrist to the sounds of Simple Plan* WAHHH- Is all good and well if ...

Eh...Let's see.... You started with a simile. That can be good. But it used a rose. That's not necessarily-so-good. Roses are the single most-used items when comparing anything to anything ...

You've got a foundation here, and that's certainly something to work with. The general idea of this is...cliche. A lot of the lines are cliche as well. If you were ...

I'd like to say your work ahs grown on me, simply in order to convince myself that I disliked it upon first reading. Unfortunately, this is the first piece of ...

Eh... I basically stopped reading after the teacher's second response. It seems like you had an idea that you could paint this beautiful image of two people conversing, both thinking ...

To be honest, this sounded like something that a transexu...scratch that. It souded like something that Good Charlotte would write. It was upbeat... but it never really expressed anything. I ...

It was a fresh form-- I'll give you that. However, is it just me or are there grammar issues in this? Maybe I should ask Meldi... At parts [specifically the ...

Ohh, I haven't seen this one before. I'm curious as to who 'us' is. You start out the poem with a definite 'you' (or my, in this case) yet by ...