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“Please tell me you're joking,” I pleaded. Olivia’s eyes were full of insanity and hatred. She wasn't going to spare me. What in the world had gotten into her? “Why ...

I really liked this. A few things are a bit wrong, however. This isn't wrong, but you come off as a tad obsessed. "I love your mistakes, your height is ...

This is awesome, but I don't really understand some of the language... Haha that's a 12 year old for you! I especially like the fact that this is all just ...

I really like this buuut, i dont really get it. What do you mean by powers? Water breathing? Should this be in the Fantasy section? Also, it was kind of ...

I really like this, the difference between a christian girl and a drug addict boy. Poem a la AWESOME! We are so different just in two days two days being, ...

Biffle here to review. Wow, I have never reviewed a piece this long. here we go. He heard the voice and turned, and their eyes met. He was about to ...

Hey there, review as promised. (Just note I have never really learned proper poetry terms and well yeah, I suck) Okay, in the first 'paragraph' and a bit of the ...

Bifflesocks here to review. First. The Raven It should be The Raven . "Prophet!" said I, "thing of evil! prophet still, if bird or devil! By that heaven that bends ...

This is really good, Scar, *LOVES* "It was the stupidest mistake I ever made Emily!" I dont know if im right, but the word 'stupidest' sounds odd for this part. ...

I love this but one part seems really info-dumpish... It is a beautiful wooden platform, embraced on the left by a stubby tree. The tree is more like a twisted ...

Hey there, Biffle to review: First of all, I think the brackets: 1. my (shared) room. 2.then, as I walked past ECB (Extremely Cute Boy), 3. he was seriously HOT.(And ...

Bifflesocks is here to review. This is going to be har as of the shortness. If this is supposed to be asuspense story, why does it happen so fast? Isn't ...

This was really good, buty the ending felt like you ran out of time and couldn't be bothered to finish it... Either that, or, it seemed quite cool, a short, ...

This seems like fantasy fiction... not an other. Also, no offence, but the vampires vs. werewolves thing is getting really old and cliche. Vampire hates werewolf. Big war. Family in ...

Hey Kitty Kat :) I like this poem its really dirfferent to all the others ive read. One thing Im not sure if 'Squell' is supposed to be Squeel... But ...