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it's great i didnt see any flaws....but you should write something to go around make it more of a story rather than just a short entry i think it could ...

This piece was great....but you might want to work on grammer like when dillon says "i thought you were mad at me" he says made instead of mad so just ...

i LOVED the ending...but in the first part did you mean to say skin? how can sin be perfect? that's all that i found and other than that it's perfect ...

i think this is realy good and the only thing you need to work on is making the parts flow together a bit more and making the lines a bit ...

thanks i'll try to work on punctuation but i've always had a really hard time with that.....it's almost impossible

wow...it's really good...and scary..very scary...the only thing i didnt think fit well was when you said 'he never answered her last call' you could say 'he never answered her calls' ...

it's not bad but it's kinda hard to understand...big words....gah not every one knows what those mean

This is really good....straight forward and not hard to understand. It makes sense and tells the absolute truth. lol i cant really say anything that would be of importance other ...

i dont really understand it.....the title doesnt go with the poem and i dont get the 79 part. If i thought hard enough i would probably get part of it ...

that's awesome tell me when you have more!

this is really good and i like it.....lol another good poem from Emily about iraq :)

seems like it could be a song but try fixing the first part that's all i dont like....you say bleeding twice

it's kinda weird and choppy and the lines dont run together....i love constant rhymes but only when it's not forced....

it's really good an i like it...i dont really have any tips other than just keep up the good work and this is a really good poem and it speaks ...

i really like this....but i do have a few comments. first love and wove don't rhyme and second the ending could be a little better try something other than faking ...