werewolfgirl

I like it, there is definitely emotion, and I can really imagine music, it isn't one of those songs with an indistinct mood, Good Job!

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Its interesting the audience is sort of confused in the beginnig and to a point that is a good thing, also more voice from the characther give more of the ...

okay, the edits were minimal and just basic grammar and flow mistakes.

I love the message and the emotion in the poem, I'm not a poem expert but I think maybe the flow in the middle is a little off. But I ...

I do like it, it has a really cool, urgent, dark feel about it there were some things that didn't make sense to me. read it over and pretend you ...

It wasn't bad not at all, there was voice, I did get a little confused and there was a verse or two that was a little too mushy for my ...

awesome, it was strong and you really connected with your audience, well done

I like it alot, at least the feeling, but I think the metaphor is a little heavy. A little less of the metaphor but other wise I really like it.

I really liked it especially the verse after the key change

awesome totally relate to it, I love the feel of it all, the only thing is that one of the verses was a little of rhythm/rhyme it didn't quite match ...

wow, this is really good, I'm not a poet and don't claim to be but I think even people like me can totally understand the message, it is straight forward ...

thank you all, I did re-edit it And so I will replace it with that and It has paragraphs!! yay!!