Published June 4, 2011
Shadows surround me
I can’t see where I want to be
But I know, I sure know
You are who I want to see
But there is pain, and there are lies
And my heart aches
To see your smile again
‘Cause boy, it’s been so long…
I wanna see you smile
I wanna hear you laugh
I wanna know that you’re ok
And you need to know
That things will get better
You need to learn how to live again
I don’t have the words to make things better
All I have is my heart, but that’s already yours, my love
I feel so helpless watching you go through this
Just tell me what to do
To be there for you
Coz I wanna see you smile
I wanna hear you laugh
I wanna know that you’re ok
And I want you to know
That things will get better
You need to learn how to live again
Poison, regrets
Be rid of all this hate
Coz I know, yeah I know
Hate is a mistake
So learn to love so you can learn to live
And all will be ok
Let go, but don’t forget
The past is how we give
I wanna see that crooked smile!
I wanna hear that funny laugh…
I wanna know, I wanna be sure as hell, you’re fine
'Cause boy, if you're mine
You better friggen smile
The shadows are clearing
I can see you again
And I know, I sure know
We can make it through this pain
We’ll beat these liars
My heart no longer aches
Coz there you are
Your smile’s no longer fake
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It wasn't bad not at all, there was voice, I did get a little confused and there was a verse or two that was a little too mushy for my taste, but I did like the feel and the emotion of it
Helloo Bunnie that isn't dead! XD
I'm going to try to give you a good review and forgive me if I'm not helpful at all
I really like this song and the feelings you've captured in it. I have a few little nitpicks though:
I think it would sound better if you'd let out the first 'So'.
I really love the end!
I really enjoyed reading this and I hope this helped a little =)
-qaralynn-
that was pretty amazing i liked the flow of it and where he story led you know how to keep the rythm going and that right there shows potential
very good