ultraviolet

I like this. It's nice and the words are well chosen. I do feel that so much more depth and meaning could be brought to it if you added even ...

The echoes Reverberating Through the hall, Closer, Faster, I can’t feel at all. That line flows well enough, but I think it would flow better if you did "Throughout the ...

I’m twisting and turning, in hatred and blame. I’m dancing with an unlikely prince, This is long and awkward when used with this rhyme scheme. I'd suggest changing it to ...

First, even though this is a poem, punctuation is still very important. For capitalization, you can either capitalize every line, or the beginning of every sentence. I've seen it both ...

I really like this, but I agree with Flower, adding punctuation would make it better. I know it's poetry, but punctuation is still a very important aspect. Not only does ...

I like this, but it feels... unfinished. More like a prologue than a short story. I like the idea of her rather jumping off a cliff than facing the darkness, ...

I looked into the eyes of D eath, This needs to be capitalized, because you are using it as a name. and he asked me if I was scared. I ...

The spidery fingers from his piano playing days

Red = Corrections Green = How I'd word things Blue = Things I like Bold = Part of a line I'm commenting on Italicized = Comments You may sing to ...

Chapter One: Take a deep breath. Hold it. Hold it. A little bit longer. Almost there. Just a few more seconds. Wait...almost...just a tad longer...and.....let it out. Feels good, right? ...

In my effort to be better at reviewing poetry, here I am! Don't you feel so loved? :P Deep, deep, deep inside, I feel a beat I try to hide. ...

“Holy shit, is this guy following me?” I’m abruptly pulled out of my thoughts. First, if you're deep in thought, you're not going to suddenly think some guy behind you's ...

First off, I don't usually do reviews on lyrics or poetry, but I'll do the best I can (though sorry if it's not that good). As the cold blows over ...

I have one little nitpick: I want to run around in it, sing in it, dance in it. I want to shout – no, yell , - no scream! Other ...

Here to review as requested! Red = Corrections Blue = Things I like Bold = Comments I walked up the steps of my Dad’s beachfront house, hesitating before I went ...