tzmanda

Thanks to Huggybear123 and CastlesInTheSky for your critiques. Very helpful as always. I'll have to think about this "show" as opposed to "tell" advice before I can make the nessicary ...

Sorry guys!!! I'll review chapter 1 and 2 and see what I can do.

Please critique. I know its really long but I would really like responces! :D :D :D :D :D

Chapter 2 Unwillingly Azzia was pulled from the deep slumber that had held her tired brain, and for the few seconds that followed, she tried helplessly to regain it. “Azzia,” ...

A poem that puts graffitti into the best light. Well thats new (for me any way!!) I liked it. It was a bit repetitve and slow to get into. But ...

Well, I'm glad that people are enjoying reading this and thanks for the corrections. More is definately coming!!

I don't know. It just took me a while to get into it...... When I did though, I really enjoyed it. There's something bothering me though and I just can't ...

Well, I like it so far. Keep writing, I'm interested in what cames next. 8)

Chapter 1 Azzia woke with a start and almost leapt up before realizing where she was. She pushed the large, heavy book that she had been reading off her lap ...

I would definately like the views of more people, so everyone please read and tell me what you think!! PS Thanks for the corrections eleinasari

Hey Siphiwe Well I liked it. Keep it coming, sis!

Simple, straightforward, to the point. Its not bad. Could have contained a bit more detail though