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  • Short Story » General, Realistic Re: Lies

    I think this is a really interesting piece. I enjoy the ambiguity of it where the reader is never quite given what the speaker is lying about. I'll admit I ...

    May 7, 2019
  • Poetry » General, General Re: scream

    I completely relate to this. Sometimes I feel like a walking contradiction. It seems like the juxtaposition between excess noise and the absence of it is just so hard to ...

    May 7, 2019
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Narrative Re: short story opening chapter.

    Some quick editing things, in the first paragraph, wondered I think should be wandered. the phrase "swung back and forwards" sounds smoother as "swung forwards and back". Other than those ...

    May 7, 2019
  • Short Story » Realistic, Other Re: Missing One

    A quick typo to note: I'm sure tears should be years in the first sentence. I appreciate the unsaid that is left in the wake of the actions of the ...

    May 5, 2019


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