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Hey SkyWatcher234 Are you yourself an atheist, or is just an article of general interest to you? I am an atheist, although my family is Hindu, and they have no ...

As I read this, I could actually picture a young girl walking through a ghost town haunted by disease and death. You capture the character's emotions well, which I find ...

Hi. I know this is not a whole story, but even for a prologue, it's laughable. You introduce everything too fast, without any introduction or description. The whole 'Ninja School' ...

I generally do not enjoy poetry. I like this. It is confusing. Its not touchy-feely poetry, and neither is it narrative poetry. As far as I can see, you're re-telling ...

Hey Emmylove. So first of, congratulations on staying by the iambic pentameter. Your poem is structured like a Shakespearean Sonnet, so paragraphing it like this would make it a little ...

Hey CelticaNoir, So, I liked your prologue. Haven't read chapter 1 yet, so I have no idea where this is going. No real nit-picks. I might have written things slightly ...

Uh, y---uh, nice balls. MUDKIPZZZ! Haha, this was really great. I love the Nuzlocke challenge, it makes you appreciate Pokemon you'd never use otherwise. Looks like pokerus is spreading on ...

I can't give you a full review at the moment, but I would like to talk about my basic impression of your piece. The way you started the story put ...

Hey! So, I'm not going to nitpick or find spelling errors, you can do that yourself. I'm going to talk about content. First of, I like vampires. Not the twilight ...

Hey restlesspen. I'm tr3x, and I'm going to say some pretty harsh things about this story. I realize you are a new member, so you stll have time to improve, ...

Hey, you really need to work on paragraph structuring. It was a good introductory piece, but I feel it's kind of unoriginal - a story about a damaged young woman ...

Hey, I didn't quite know what this was supposed to be, but I liked it. Very mysterious and all, but it was missing a plot line. There were a lot ...

Hey. I liked your story, but it could have been developed a lot more. Detail, characters and a central plot or narrative are missing. Also, the idea of darkness bringing ...

Hey, you've got a great storyline, but here are somethings I would do to make it more realistic. The conflict is over too fast. When Autumn dials 911 and hears ...

Hey, I'm Tr3x. So, I really liked the idea of two personalities in one body, especially since one is a machine, but I'd have liked more of a back story ...