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Re: How sad is the peacock!
wow, impressive poem i've never heard a peacock be put into that perspective before. There isn't much to say that hasn't already been said so again very good poem, keep ...
Jan 22, 2011 -
Re: Infamous ch1 part 1
I thought this was good and I'd like to read more but at the moment it's a little boring, not interesting enough to make you want to read more, I ...
Jan 22, 2011 -
Re: Dreams - an illusion maybe
Well first off welcome to YWS :) if you need any help just pm.... somebody or ask somebody who is green, they know things. First off I really liked the ...
Jan 22, 2011 -
Re: Summer Romance (no title selected)
First off welcome to YWS :) Pm me if you need any help or ask the guys in green - they know things ( we may be confusing :) ) ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: The Moon
I loved this poem, problem is the very first line threw me off, a clam? i'm sorry it just made me laugh for some reason and i don't feel it ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: The Ending War (Percy Jackson Fan Fic.) Chapt. I
Wow I thought this was really good, I'm not too big of a percy jackson fan but it was quite interesting :) I'm not going to give it a big ...
Jan 16, 2011 -
Re: Dreams Tell Lies - Preface
Wow very impressive :) Kind of powerful for such a short piece. Only problems: . In a way I found it surreal it then goes on to say; It would ...
Jan 16, 2011 -
Re: Piece Of Perfection
Wow, very impressive, i really liked the feel of the story, The ending was my favourite part :) The sun was rising as I glanced out the window. A tear ...
Jan 15, 2011 -
Re: Can't Let You Go
Very Powerful :) The only thing that let it down was the flow, it felt broken, lIkE. YOu.. HaAd T.o REAd iT lik.E t.h.i.s. There were only a couple of ...
Jan 15, 2011 -
Re: Tainted-Prologue
Sounded good, like EAThomas said i think you need to take off the italics and break it up into paragraphs, other than that it was interesting and i'd love to ...
Jan 5, 2011 -
Re: Another day (working title...)
I thought this was really good, this was my favourite part And then the evening unfolds, And up in space the moon beholds... On empty blackened cloudless skies And quiet ...
Jan 5, 2011 -
Re: 101 Things I Want to Do before I Die
Cool list, geuss like everyone else said you need to cross off 100 a lot of the things you want to do are really easily done, very inspirational :) I ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: Lost Love Chapter 1 (first ever story)
It was really good :) the onlly problems were to do with the flow of it. His perfect eyes, his soft and shiny hair, his cute smile that made me ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: A Life Seeing the Cullens
I thought this was very good, I don't think there were any grammar or spelling mistakes and it was a very imaginitive idea. You missed Jasper out on the part ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Christmas
Wow, very good, it was simple but it made it effective (ok, I admit it - i don't know wether it's an e or an a but...). Christmas I i ...
Dec 19, 2010