Christmas

Christmas Is here,
All the lights, all the bells. small a
Sales in shops,
and toys all around.

Gifts under the tree,
The angel ontop.small t
Nativity scenes,
And the bonbons go pop.small a

Such a wonderful time,
and a busy one too.
With cards in my hand,
Merry christmas to you!
it is a very good poem though

It's a lovely poem and is bound to get everyone in the Christmas spirit. I totally agree with the poem
and have no problems with it. There are a few minor mistakes that tinkembell pointed out but apart
from those small mistakes I don't think you did anything wrong with this poem. It's great to read and
it does highlight the favorite parts of Christmas. Well done this is a great poem and you should keep
writing these kinds of poems because you did a great job of this one. Something else I forgot to add
at the start was that I really liked the way you rhymed the verses but in the first verse I couldn't see
any rhyming at all. Was that intentional or did you make a mistake with that particular verse???
Anyway Well done and keep writing

From Me
>.<

A nice and simple poem that reminds us of the joys and splendours of our (my) favourite time of the year! I like it!

Wow, very good, it was simple but it made it effective (ok, I admit it - i don't know wether it's an e or an a but...).

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Sales in shops,
and toys all around.

Gifts under the tree,
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Nativity scenes,
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Such a wonderful time,
and a busy one too.
With cards in my hand,
M #FF0000 ">merry christmas to you!