timjim77

It felt as if while reading it the narrator was panting for breath, as if she was running away from something. Loved that effect. The poem would have benefited if ...

For one, DO NOT introduce your works. It degrades your work. Imagine if you opened a novel, and the first page was a bunch of reasons the author gave for ...

Wow. You have some really tough critics here. I really enjoyed this poem. The rhythm flowed and supported your meaning. I'm a sucker for when form and meaning meet. While ...

Wow. This makes me want to give you a caustic critique just so I feel all that emotion in your next poem. This poem is very difficult to critique, because ...

Well, great. Now we have another piece that forces us to define poem, prose, and everything else. I agree that this is not a poem, but before we tell someone ...

I liked the second one better. The first seems full of itself. The second though, has a very intersting, unique style. It comes off as a dialogue, and utilizes line ...

Once again, doing what you do best, pairing words and painting images. Your poems often come across as paintings, and when you make the right strokes, they are pure beauty. ...

The imagery and word choice is incredible with the exception of the last stanza and line, which dragged the poem down a little bit. The content is a bit stale, ...

"Binary of my shadows." Awesome. I enjoyed this, and I like the way youn use words. Your selection of words I would disagree with at times. This poem would benefit ...

1. Do not change tense within your story, except in rare circumstances when you know exactly what you are doing. Generally, the past tense (the perfect, to be gramatically correct) ...

Show and Tell. Writers often have trouble knowing when to do which, and all writers sometimes slip. But as a rule, it is usually better to show than to tell. ...

Fanged obsidian asps. Hmm. Well, I'm not quite sure what to say, because while I liked most of the indivdual parts, I did not like the poem as a whole. ...

This poem is good for its honesty, its frankness, and its accurate and mind-boggling descriptions. So my problem with the poem is: Mercutio, heading for the door, stops to wish ...

The emphasis in this poem definitely is more on the words and the sound of the words and the rhythm, which I like. The rhythm is great. It pounds when ...

This poem is very clever. But it would be cleverer still if since it is in the first person the "Ego" were not so aware of his narcissism, because that ...