tigeraye

ah, dw about that, I'm horrible with discerning between genders online

I also plan on *hd rereleasing* chapters 3, 14, 15 16 and 17 when motivation comes knocking on my door..

Thank you for reviewing, I'll make some edits about the dialogue.

thanks for reviewing. What I'm probably going to do is end up scrapping chapter two and three altogether and just rewriting them, as I think they can be much improved ...

Ah, well, I kind of get that what happened here doesn't tend to happen in real life, but strange and miraculous medical cases do tend to happen so I was ...

hello, thanks for reviewing. I'm actually going to rename this to the first part of chapter one, just haven't gotten to it yet ^^

hm, I'll keep it in mind when I go back and do edits. thank you.

Thanks

Thanks for reviewing. Dr. Blade's death was announced on the radio at the end of the chapter before this one

Well, I mean they don't have to just be talking, you can also show their moods better by describing their physical actions, like shutting their eyes when they're stressed, or ...

thanks friend. Have a happy holidays ^^

I actually forgot, your actions are a little bit plain, they're sort of like "he did this" "she did that" if you know what I mean. Try to add more ...

yes!! Please do continue it, I really want to know what happens next ^^

Oh, and to add to this: I noticed you started past tense, then switched to present tense, then went back to past tense. don't do that

Hello, here to review the last part. Sorry that my reviews on this got lousier, it has nothing to do with your end, just me running out of things to ...