tigeraye

“You need to stop.” Carlota looked at Jack through the mirror as he spoke. He was standing in the door, and by his expression, you’d think he had seen the ...

I liked the characters in this, very relateable and have a sort of quirky, everyday vibe to them. I thought you had a nice touch by having the father complain ...

I was walking through a forest that reminded me remarkably of one of the hiking trails that surrounded my house. There was water rushing at the bottom of a small ...

I thought this was a pretty interesting chapter, in part because of the colorful nature of your characters. They all interact with each other a realistic, contemporary way that exemplifies ...

This is a fascinating story with an interesting take on two different viewpoints on what religion is, and what it really means. I think a central theme (perhaps not one ...

You have a very commendable writing style; I like the sort of euphoric emotion that your narrative contains, it’s very pleasing to read. You’re also very skilled at creating drama ...

When I was in high school, my father would sometimes pick me up from band practice. It was a predominately white school, and I got my mom’s European features so ...

You have a nice writing style, your description is very impressively emotive. You seem to have gotten into this guy's head quite well. But this chapter seems a little aimless, ...

Layla only has one goal in life,to finish High School. So what, she's going to finish High School and sit on her couch the rest of her life? erm, I ...

This is interesting in the sense that you managed to take something simple like crawling out of bed, and explode it over seven paragraphs. But it feels lost at parts, ...

Overall, this is really well written. The beginning is gripping with an exquisite sense of detail and description, it's eye-catching and marvelous. The ending is a very interesting hook that ...

ah, this was a fun read. Let me reiterate again that I love your characters, they have so much life to them, and seem very realistic to me. Your description ...

Well, you have a certain down-to-earth writing style that I find really enjoyable. Your characterization is also really really good, they all seem realistic and relate-able in the way they ...

I think this is very powerful writing, but it feels directionless. You have a very good sense of emotion, but this is really long and doesn't seem to have much ...

I think you have a good sense of building suspense in a story; all-in-all, I found the beginning to be rather thrilling. Furthermore, your writing has a certain sense of ...