thewonderworldofnight

Okay, I like this world you've created. It's very... dark , very black. But there are some things which are bothering me. Your character, Gink, thinks details. No one really ...

I really like your idea and what you've written so far. It's catchy, it keeps your audience reading. now for some critiquing. what happened with Tristan and Elizabeth? You can ...

So pick up a paint brush and create my mural. This seems kind of random; you go from "you never see me" to "pick up a paintbrush". Maybe a little ...

aww, Lovevol is adorable :-) I definitely agree with Adam_Atlantian, you should write stories about him. Mayhap, if you can draw cartoons (which I can't, so if you can I ...

Okay, this probably sounds cliche, but I hear your voice in this and it's really good. I also really like your metaphors. Now to the crticism. What is this about? ...

Okay, this is sad in a really good, cute way! If I were you, I'd definitely write more about this! Also, a few things: --Is Alexial a real goddess/immortal or ...

Hmmm...I tried reading it a few years back, but maybe I just wasn't ready for it...maybe I'll try it again ;-) Isn't it sad when such good writers die in ...

The weirdest book I've read (and it's and oldie) was the Canterbury Tales. Just weird... Yeah, I'd have to agree with you there...especially the tale of the Wife of Bath ...

that was really good!!! it was confusing at the beginning. Perhaps you could write more of the scenery, as it wasn't obvious as to where they were. Also, I'm kind ...

Okay, so now i've read your first chapter... a few critiques: 1) the dialogue seems unnatural. Maybe it's just me, but it goes from formal dialogue to slang too quickly ...

wow...i really liked that, though it was kinda angsty. if you want to title it, perhaps "a lonely lover" (like how Shakespeare didn't title his poems so they just gained ...

Considering that Hermione and Ron were never really together as a couple except for a short time in this fanfic and Harry and Ginny only really spoke once before getting ...

Your descriptions and colors are great, but does this really belong in fanfiction? If it does, what is it from? It's really good anyway...if it's not really a fanfic, maybe ...

Personally, I think it's better without the epilogue at the end; the epilogue just waters out a really powerful peace. I loved it, but I figure you'll want some criticism ...

It's a classic...you won't be able to live without it!!! People will make references to it forever and if you haven't read it you'll feel extremely lost! It's not my ...