theotherone

Hello there. :) I'm here as requested! I'll begin with grammar, and then give my overall impression on your plot. Corrections are in red, comments are in bold. if there's ...

Hey, I'm here again to review chapter two! :) I'll quote the whole thing so it's easier to correct your mistakes. :) Author's Note: This isn't the most eventful chapter ...

Hello there. :) I'll quote the whole thing so I can comment and show grammatical mistakes at the same time. :) So red for corrections and bold for comments. If ...

Hello there. :) I tried not to think I still needed him to after six and a half months of this. I couldn't deny though that I wanted him to ...

Hello there. :) My dad felt having money didn’t mean we needed everything new. Yet, I couldn’t see this when she was talking about . Still, every night as I ...

Hello there. :) I'm going to make a review chapter by chapter. If there's nothing written about one, it's just that I have nothing to say. :) Chapter One- staring ...

Hello there. :) Hot breath on the base of my neck sent shivers through every nerve. Time seemed to have stopped. My life would never had ended this way, but ...

Hello Allie. I'm here for another review! Red is the corrections, and bold are the comments. Sentences that are in red AND bold... It means that there will be a ...

Hello there. :) Incredible story you've got there. The mystery of the dream just keeps the reader guessing until the end, and I was mad when in the end she ...

Hello there. :) Like Gracie said, there's not really a plot in there. A conflict between them, or even a internal conflict in the MC... It's just like rambling about ...

Hello there. :) Damn I had jam on toast , I thought. Thoughts should be in italics. “You’ll see,” she said, cocking her head in the direction of my office. ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks. Corrections are in red, and comments are in bold. Something in red AND bold means there's no correction, but there's a comment ...

Hello there. :) Any way , he was around that day. Did you mean Anyway? I liked this short story. It was short and really sweet. I don't think it ...

Hello there. :) A half-selfish desire, mayhap , but a desire to make her happy, nonetheless. Is this supposed to be maybe ? Or perhaps ? For the following minutes ...

Hello there. :) She nervously smiled, and my palms were sweating , not sure about what I was going to say next. This is a little bit awkward. It might ...