theobliviousoracle

This is good, real good. There are things I would like to mend but since it's just a part of the bigger picture, I'll wait till then; not much though. ...

Thank you! :)

I felt that you are telling a bit too much about what the characters are feeling. You are telling us that the tears came out of her eyes and she ...

Thank you for reviewing. I actually do have a problem in keeping my poems short as by the time I put down all my thoughts in the right direction on ...

So small yet so elegant. I love the way it ends, mere ten seconds and it's over and then it leaves you craving for more, much more. Great job.

Thank you! As for the odd breaks, I don't know why but I deliberately did those to add effects. What effects? I don't know. This poem practically flowed out of ...

Thank you! It means a lot. :)