tgirly

God gave you the gift of words. It was so moving, I could feel your faith in every word. I'm awestruck by the power of your testimony, I can't believe ...

We were reading "Nothing Gold Can Stay" by Robert Frost, and it kinda reminded me of this poem in a good way. Just thought I'd tell you!

Did no one get the Christian theme? It was kinda subtle... Maybe too subtle. Thanks for the reviews, though.

Forgot to mention: love the title!!! It's what got me interested in it in the beginning.

Also, if you could PM me when you finish the second chapter, that would be great.

I like two and five the best. My least favorite, is probably one, because it seems a little, I don't know, immature to me.... but that's just my opinion. My ...

I like two and five the best. My least favorite, is probably one, because it seems a little, I don't know, immature to me.... but that's just my opinion. My ...

I liked it. It might have more flow if it was "But you can't see" but it's more dramatic the way you have it, so that's your choice. I agree ...

I like it. It's deep. My only nitpick is in the first stanza, instead of "plane," it should be "plain." Unless you mean "plane" as in the geometrical plane. Other ...

I really liked this poem, but I feel the last stanza doesn't have as much flow as the other ones. Good job, though :) -tgirly

I feel that the question at the beginning should be seperate from the rest of the paragraph. I do like it a lot. I thinkg you should edit it a ...

Your welcome, it definitely has more flow now. Good job. I LOVE your avvie! :P -tgirly

I like the poem, but it doesn't really have any flow. Poems need flow. You should probably work on that. Have a good summer. Keep on writing -tgirly

It is a funny poem. I like the reference to Twilight. You have to remember to capitalize the first word of each line. Under the line, where it says: Silence ...

I think you could break it up into more than one stanza to give it more flow, but other than that, I like how it melds into the next line ...