teenweirdo

It is a nice little poem. I like it a lot. I spotted a typo: They all turn there backs Just change it to "their." I like the personification of ...

Pretty good. Some of it sounded like it didn't flow very well. Too many syllables at some parts, I think. Read it aloud and see if you can make some ...

Eh, kind of choppy, like Vampy and Rickage said. Maybe you can change some of the words. "These feelings I say." This is an example of choppiness. Try to reword ...

Seems like a nice poem to me, but the rhyming scheme is all over the place: AABCCDEFA If you are going to make something rhyme, be sure it has a ...

Hi, there! Wow, I love the passion in this poem. I hope you'll do great in the contest. Here's my advice. I am a cursed one. Like flames that lick ...

Your friend is a pretty good writer, but I would suggest some changes. I had friends, family, and a house, I was perfectly happy! Why did it have to go ...