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  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Maia (REVISED!!)

    I had read your "un-revised" version. I liked that but this I............................... I love it !. I really like the last line "I knew you didn't want to be alone." ...

    Jan 26, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Born To Die

    Hi ! I don't know whether or not you got your idea from this movie "Domino" or not but some aspects where just like how they were in the movie, ...

    Jan 20, 2012
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Prisoner

    I really liked your story, I think I've read a story somewhat based on this. Your formatting chipped off the effect of story. The space that you left didn't so ...

    Jan 13, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Chapel

    Hi Robythegerm , I'll be reviewing your work today and yeah here goes . 1) In the line "He was actually knowing everything" yeah Knowing is a grammatical error it ...

    Jan 12, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Twenty Questions

    I found this really interesting . I'm guessing you watch a lot of murder and mystery programs ? . It sounded like something that would happen in this show "Castle" ...

    Jan 10, 2012
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Letting off steam...

    Dude,I kind of know what you mean. Sometimes my mom compares me to my friends and even I get's irritating,knowing someone is going to point a finger and say something ...

    Jan 10, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: It's Not His Kiss [Edited]

    If I ever , ever , ever , ever ,ever ever , ever , ever , ever ,ever ever , ever , ever , ever ,ever ever , ever , ...

    Dec 17, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Truth

    Hey , I found a few mistakes first in your writing so here goes nothing ! In the line even the stream spoke louder than he , It would make ...

    Dec 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Flowing Desire

    uh welcome to YWS first of all ! Of deepening desires Of growing growls Of insatiable hunger This part kinda reminded me of food for some reason even though I ...

    Dec 11, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Happy Unhappy Ending: Chapter 6

    1. how come Tony's chapters are so small 2. It's Tony's chapters that make me want to read 3. I take back my comment in fifth chapter about the meg ...

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Happy Unhappy Ending: Chapter 5

    Till now it's all about drugs and sex and yeah that's pretty much it , see there has to be something in the book your writing that will make it ...

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Happy Unhappy Ending: Chapter 4

    I found this chapter kind of okay . There are a few typing error's , nothing major , but once your done writing your work review it just once . ...

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: As I Sat Sadly By Her Side.

    First of all , it was really good , it kept me hooked on , but at places my attention would get diverted , and I really like this line ...

    Dec 1, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: An Ugly Girl

    Amazing ! and yes I know i'm under the age limit ! :P ! I found it really really good , It kept me hooked on through out but I ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: New (I'm still working on the title)

    I'm really sorry but why were they called to auditorium and not to the principal's office , according to me it would make more sense to call them to principle's ...

    Nov 27, 2011


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