sylverdawn

I don't really get whats going on. But it's a prologue so that doesn't matter, I'm sure I'll get more answers as the story progresses. I think you did a ...

I really like this, the plot line moves along very smoothly and its easy to follow. I also like the ideas for where the story's going. For a beginning it ...

really good, I was a little confused at first, because I got the feeling one of the dragon's was a boy. "This roused a third voice to impassioned speech. "Kazreadrakanek!" ...

Overall this is a good story. The spelling and grammar mistakes were a bit of a hassle but its still readable. I agree with what a lot of people said ...

Also if you spell Vampyr like this in story maybe you should spell Vampire bat like that. i'm enjoying this story but i have to disagree with this point, vampire ...

:D I really enjoyed the story it has a strong flow with good ideas. I believe the prolouge is meant to ensnare the reader and set a foundation for the ...

i liked it but a couple times it seemed like u were changing from present to past??? it was a little confusing but i enjoyed it alot, I agree with ...

good story, but I don't think theres enough background. Too many unanwsered questions. also, i think the names are not creative enough. (a sorcerer named John?!) otherwise though it seems ...