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stygianmoon17

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  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, Other Re: WW1 Trench Warfare Descriptive Writing

    The descriptions are really good, really paint a picture, But it's a bit over-descriptive. I mean, I guess that was the point, but it's a lot of adjectives. Like, let's ...

    Mar 17, 2024
  • Short Story » Horror, Narrative Re: The Body On the Ceiling

    Hey there :D Hope you're having a great day! I saw the title of this short and i just HAD to check it out On to the review! The beginning ...

    Jul 28, 2022
  • Short Story » Horror, Teen Fiction Re: The Murders

    Hi there, hope you're having a great day/ night/ afternoon/.. :D Off with a review! While a journal entry is a great idea to tackle murder mysteries, it's a bit ...

    Jul 28, 2022
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Narrative Re: Motel Midnight

    Hey there, good evening/afternoon/morning/.. I'm here for a short review :P Miles and miles of dryland surrounded us as the sunset. Smooth blues and citrus clouds hid behind the plateau. ...

    Jan 4, 2022
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Short story

    Hey there, hope you're having a wonderful (insert time of day) :D Hmm for such a short short story, this has a lot to unpack THEORY 1: this guy is ...

    Jan 4, 2022
  • Short Story » Theatre, General Re: Last Dance

    Hey there, stygianmoon17 here for a review :D Just gotta say, the sort of synopsis of your story, is just GREAT I was immediately intrigued the moment i read it ...

    Dec 23, 2021
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: Tunnel

    Hey there, stygianmoon here for a review :D As a huge fan of horror, I just HAD to check this out :p Let's start with the negatives, I felt like ...

    Dec 12, 2021
  • Short Story » General, General Re: ...

    Hey there ! This is quite an old "work", if I can call it that haha, But I saw it in the green room, so let's pull it out from ...

    Dec 9, 2021
  • Art » Narrative, General Re: Forgive Me Angel đź’”

    Hey there ! Here with a review :D This was a really moving piece. I loved the way you presented this incredibly serious yet true topic. It's something not enough ...

    Dec 8, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Connection - 45

    Hey there ! Before I move on analysing this piece, I just saw your synopsis (?) The thing under the title, which says what your story is about. Ok so ...

    Dec 8, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Supernatural Re: 2 - Kate

    Hey there ! Hope you're having a lovely day ! Or night ! Or afternoon ! Or whatever Okay wow ! This was quite a read ! Let's start with ...

    Dec 8, 2021
  • Short Story » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Author’s note: Why I give up writing short horror stories

    Hey there, @BeingRivy, here for a review :) I think this story really holds up together, there's only this one thing that needs a bit more effort. Your characters. For ...

    Dec 4, 2021
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Other Re: Eloise’s parents-Their story

    Hey there, hope you're having a great (insert time of day), here to drop a quick review :D Ooh the characters are extremely lovely, gacha really brought them to life ...

    Dec 2, 2021
  • Short Story » Health, Realistic Re: What Was and What Could Have Been

    Hello there LizzyTyler, hope you're having a lovely (insert current time) Since this is something for school, I'll try organising this better, the first part will be about grammar mistakes ...

    Dec 2, 2021
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Other Re: Eloise’s story-The main villain in:”Eloise-the demented doll woman”

    Hey there ! Hope you're having a great day/ night :) I haven't read your other story, Eloise- the demented doll woman, so I won't have a lot of context ...

    Nov 1, 2021


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