stargazer9927

Very sad story :( The first thing I would like to comment on is your diaolgue. You obviously do the best with that because it was consant throughout, but it ...

Wow, just wow. I really have nothing to say because it was short and amazing. Great work! I don't think I've ever used an - because I know nothing about ...

I'm finally here to read and review the next chapter. I don't always work very quickly ;) First of all, once again great work and I loved it. I plan ...

I'm having a hard time seeing the "poetic" sense to this. It just seems to me like you're throwing a bunch of words together it putting them into stanzas. I ...

I also think it's flooding with emotion, but it lacks detail. And I would have to agree with the review before me, how is he writing this with no education? ...

I love this idea! I can already predict what your plot is from the first chapter, so you did a good job of making me interested and getting me thinking. ...

This was amazing! I didn't catch any errors, your writing was amazing, and this was an awesome idea. I couldn't have come up with something this cool. At first I ...

Red = Grammar errors Blue = My comments Green [Comma] = Comma needs to be there I knew it was going to be an unsual day when my mom came ...

This was beautiful. This was actually a dream or did you just have a dream and this came to you? Either way it was so powerful and I could feel ...

I would have to agree with the review before me. This was a very well thought out story and you did ten times better than I could have done with ...

I have no reveiw for you but I just want to say if you hate Algebra wait until you get higher up. I took Calculus last year and I suck ...

I loved this! I think it's the best fanfiction novel I've ever read! I love Harry Potter and this not only stuck with the same characters but it was halarious. ...

I think this was a great idea and you certainly have quite the imagination. Okay, nit picks first: Mother’s last words were “I love you” and the last she would ...

I thought this was well written and I found it funny they could manipulate the man:) The one thing that bothered me as I was reading this was they seemed ...

This was a cute story, but kind of sad. I've never read any of your other chapters (or even know what this novel is about for that matter) but from ...