starchaser

Hey! Interesting story you've got there. I liked the humor of the story. However, I did notice some errors. I'm going to point out three that I found within the ...

Hello! I really liked your poem! It was very cute. I'm assuming that you or someone you know has a rabbit (If not, please correct me), and it seems that ...

Hello! Interesting story you've got there. While writing, I highly suggest you stay away from text faces, such as ":)" or ":/". Also, Rachel's father's name would be Frank Frank, ...

Hey! This is quite an interesting poem! I love how you portray being lovesick- "a burning sensation", "i can’t tell anything apart/it’s all just a blur of color/vibrant saturated color". ...

Hey! Nice poem! I really liked how you described veins as "tangled roots", and loved the line "but like snow, some things fade when you get too close". I personally ...

Greetings, and welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here! The story is very capitvating, and it makes me wonder what led up to this, and what would happen ...